18 Mota Gur St.

Holon, Israel

January 28, 2010

Yale University
7 Roses St.
New- York, U.S.A

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Emilia. I am twenty five years old. I am writing this letter since I would like to apply for admission to your university. I understand you have an excellent course in theater, which I would really like to take part in.

Since I remember myself, I have always dream(gr.) (of becoming..) an actor.



In conclusion, I would like you to give me the opportunity to participate in the course. I have got much to contribute. Please, make my dream come true.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely yours,
EmiliaCoper.

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The Caribbean Islands Vacation

8 Mota Gur St.

Holon, Israel

21 July, 2010

The Manager's Office

"Sea To See" Tours

7 Roses St.

Tel Aviv, Israel

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Dear Sir/Madam,

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A month ago I went with my fiance on a vacation in the Caribbean Islands, organized by your agency. I have been your customer for the past few years, but unfortunately, this time your service was far from satisfactory.

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First and foremost, I was deeply disappointed with our guide. It seemed that the guide had apparently visited those places for the first (time). As a result, we lost precious time in finding the right routes. To complicate things even further, he did not seem to be very professional, as it was promised in your brochure. On certain occasions, he could not answer the simpliest(sp.) questions about the magnificent places we visited.

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Furthermore, the service we were given in the hotel was dissapointing and did not lap the information written in your brochure. We discovered there were some mistakes regarding the booking, which caused unnecassary inconvenience. When we arrived at the dining room, we were amazed to see that the staff was selfish and unwilling to work.

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To conclude, in the light of the problems mentioned above, I believe it is your duty to give this matter your urgent attention. I request a full refund of the money paid within 14 days.

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Sincerely yours,

Emilia Cooper

Excellent. (I can see that you got some help).

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Daphna

No More Hungry Children!

18 Mota Gur St.
Holon, Israel
January 28, 2010

"Almost An Angel" Organization

7 Roses St.

Jerusalem, Israel

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Dear Sir/Madam,

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In response to an article I have read about your organization called "Almost An Angel", I would like to have the opportunity to join as a volunteer in the organization. I wish to apply for the position of a children caretaker, whose role is to feed and take care (of) hungry children.

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I love(gr. - use the present perfect) children ever since I know myself. They are our future, and seeing misreable children looking for a tiny piece of bread breaks my heart. During(ww.) the years, I used to spend many holidays moving from one supermarket to another trying to convince people to donate some money or products for the sake of these poor children.

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Apart from my love to children, I have a(מיותר) vast experience working with children. Over the past two years, I have been working in a kintergarden as a teacher. This work equipped me with many qualifications, such as working under pressure as well as many tools for education, which I am sure will be required for this job.

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I believe that my qualifications and my valuable exprience make me suitable for this position. I would be more than delighted to come for an interview at your convinience.

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Truly yours,

Emilia Cooper

Very good.

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Daphna

Virtual Schools

Can traditional schools replace virtual schools? In the modern age virtual schools have played a significant role. The Virtual classroom is a new and appealing way of studying, which might make(ww.) more interesting.(for whom?). Students study via the internet, and they are not dependant on books and stationery, but on the computer.

This is a great start, but where is the rest?
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Daphna

24 Ahron Yariv St.

Holon

December 3, 2009

Ms. Gilat Simon
The Principal Office
Kugel high school
1 Mota-Gur St.
Holon

Dear Gilat,

This year, as it is already a custom, thousands of 11th grade students, have been given the opportunity to go on a trip to Poland, following the roots of the Jewish nation. This trip is very significant to Israelis and Jews; therefore, I want to take part in this important journey. I am writing this letter because I would like to complain about the enormous price of this journey, which many students can’t afford.

This journey to Poland has a lot of importance to the Jewish life. Many students want to follow this part of our history, but unfortunately their economic situation prevents this desire. It is not right, and it is a discrimination, that only those with economic abilities can go through this emotional experience, which affect(gr.) the continued observation about life.(phr. - not clear what you mean)

Moreover, the main propose of this journey is to remember and not to forget. The best way to remember and try to understand what happened in the Holocaust is by exploring its routs in freezing Poland. But when the price is too high, the students can’t smell the smell(phr.) of horror, and can’t see the places, where six milion innocent victims lived and weremurdered .

To conclude, I believe that it is our government's duty to show(ww.) initiative and finance this journey, so that every teenager in Israel will have the ability to be a part of the expedition going to Poland. I hope you will invest your entire endeavors to lower the price and make this journey approachable for every 11th grader in your school.

I look forward to your reply.

Sincerely yours,

Emilia Cooper

Very good work.

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Daphna

A Summer's Reading

George Stoyonovich is the main character of the “A Summer’s Reading”. George is a twenty-year-old young man, who lives with his father and sister in a poor New-York neighborhood. George’s attempt to make a change in his life, made me understand that life can be better only if we change our attitude.

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At the age of sixteen, George dropped out of school. This lack of education leads George to a point in which he can hardly find an honorable job to finance himself. He spends his time reading shallow magazines, brought home by his sister Sophie. He also likes wandering about in the streets, trying to escape his gloomy reality and find some peace. He grows up in an unsupportive environment, and it makes it difficult for him to begin a fresh start.

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His desire to change his life significantly is interfered with his remarkable laziness and immaturity. He doesn't have enough willpower to pick up a worthwhile book and read it till the end. Everything in George's life changes considerably thanks to Mr. Cattanzara, his neighbor. Mr. Cattanzara spreads rumors about George, which change the attitude of the neighborhood people for the better. People begin respecting him and treat him kindly. It makes him feel confident and more appreciative of his life.

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At the beginning of the story, I thought that George's character was not interesting and disappointing. But, as the story developed and George managed to realize his life, I learned to appreciate him and even love him. I believe George's character should be a role model for people like him. I hope George pursues a better life after the change he has made.

Excellent work!

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Daphna

Great Expectations

If you are looking for great expectations while reading a book, "Great Expectations" is the right book for you. Great Expectations is the thirteenth novel written by Charles Dickens. The book is considered one of the masterpieces of Dickens. The desire of Pip to become a gentleman, despite all the difficulties, and the irony in the story made me keep reading the novel.

Pip is a sensitive child, an orphan living under the care of his cruel sister and her husband, Joe. Joe loves and supports Pip unconditionally, even when Pip is ashamed of him and abandons him. Pip’s life changes after showing kindness to an escaped convict, Magwith. He becomes a wealthy man with a great education, unaware that his benefactor is a convict.

Pip rejects his upbringing in favor of a more refined life in London. His biggest hope is to become a gentleman. But when Pip discovers the identity of his benefactor, all his great expectations dissolve into shame of the convict and he is disgusted with himself for his gradual change. Despite his shame, he is obligated to protect his benefactor out of loyalty and gratitude.

In conclusion, I highly recommend you read this wonderful book. This novel teaches us a great lesson about friendship and loyalty. In addition, Charles Dickens is a distinctive author, and he has his own style of writing .

Excellent!

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Daphna